User talk:MTSpencer79/Übermensch/Mmarinkovic5678 Peer Review

The last sentence of the second to last paragraph reads "Through realizing this new set of values, the Übermensch is perfect because they have mastered all human obstacles." Then the very next sentence, the one you propose to add, says "Nietzsche's concept of the Übermensch is perfect, because they have overcome all human obstacles." If you want to keep something like this, you should probably at least change the wording; right now it's just too similar to what's already there.

- I agree that I should change the wording to be less redundant here. I will change human obstacles to challenges in order to not re-use the same term twice.

"The dogma of Catholicism had become outdated and left the void of nihilism." This is kind of already talked about, not once, but twice.

Even if you do want to retain your addition, I would recommend changing "dogma of Catholicism" to "dogma of Christianity." Especially considering Nietzsche lived in the primarily Protestant region of Germany, his target was Christianity in general, not just Catholicism.

- I agree with this edit. Nietzsche did live among Protestants so it would be more appropriate to refer to Christianity as a whole rather than just Catholicism here.

"The Übermensch rejects asceticism and instead lives their life to the fullest by sucking the marrow out of life." I understand what you mean by this, but a lot of other people may not catch on to this metaphorical language. Thus, it probably isn't appropriate for Wikipedia and could be restated in clearer terms. In general, I think a lot of your proposed additions could be fit into the already existing paragraphs. Alternatively, if you're going to keep that last paragraph, I would avoid just regurgitating things that have been said already, which is what I think you've sort of done.

- I will reword this sentence to retain my intended meaning but I will remove the metaphor since the language may not be suitable for Wikipedia.

Thank you for taking the time to review my article!! I appreciate your valuable suggestions and proposed revisions :)