User talk:Maddywright

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Hello, Maddywright, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Response
Hi, I have some feedback for you:


 * The first two sources are fine, but the third is a little iffy. I don't know that it's unusable, just that if possible I'd try to find a stronger source.
 * This is written in a bit of a casual style, so it needs to be a little more formal. I've put together a bit of an example in your sandbox as to how the page could read - definitely feel free to use and adapt the writing however you like.
 * Avoid mentioning price points, as we can't guarantee that these are the average prices for the dolls or the full range.
 * You should also avoid point of view statements like surprising, as terms like this are subjective to the reader. Some may be surprised, while others may not be.

I hope that this all helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:43, 9 April 2019 (UTC)