User talk:Madelinehartman/sandbox

Hi Madeline,

I think you've done a great job on your article. I'll address it in the Wikipedia Peer Review training format, but I just wanted to say that overall I think it's well put together.

1. A lead section that is easy to understand Nice overview. Short and succinct. A little bit odd you start two sentences with "He is also", but that's pretty minor. Good overview.

2. A clear structure Yes, this is all laid out nicely, good choice on where to break up the categories. Not seeing much under 'Professional Organizations' or 'Personal Life', but I'm assuming that's just because you're still fleshing these out.

3. Balanced coverage Well balanced. Not overly detailed in one section at the detriment of another. Sections look well balanced, and do a good job of looking at his past and his present, instead of just recent accomplishments. Again I'd talk about the organizations and personal life, but I'm sure that's in the making.

4. Neutral content Definitely neutral, I don't feel like I'm reading from his autobiography or from a piece written by a close friend. The tone is very consistent throughout, with simple statements of facts about his life and work. Nice job.

5. Reliable sources Sources are reliable looking! I like that there's some variation between sources addressing him personally (the interview) as well as third parties that give him a professional overview; that is nicely done.

6. Other Under "career", I don't think you should say "he's spent the last ten years," as people will be looking up Robert Malenka in the future. Perhaps a definite date. MeyerCord (talk) 22:14, 22 June 2018 (UTC)