User talk:MadisonLiggio/sandbox

JBaumgartner Feedback: Deschooling
You appear to have some ideas of some areas of improvement. I would encourage you to work to make some changes, making sure to support each statement with a citation. When you make an edit make sure to chronicle it in the talk page of the article. Jj baumgartner (talk)Jjbaumgartner —Preceding undated comment added 23:20, 22 October 2018 (UTC) JBaumgartner, thank you for your feedback. I will make sure to continue making changes and chronicling them in my partner's sandbox. --MadisonLiggio (talk) 01:32, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

LaurenImmel Feedback: Deschooling
Also, in Deschooling by Ivan Illich, they stated that schools were insufficient because they were curricular, and that improving one skill was related to another irrelevant task[2]. For example, they stated class attendance determining the students ability to use the playground[2].

-For the above two sentences, I would possibly clarify what you are stating here. To me, it is a little confusing. I would not start a sentence with "also," and I would also be sure to clarify what is meant by the second sentence. Are you saying that a consequence for not attending class was not being able to play on the playground? I would reword/rework these two. I would rank this article with around a 3. I feel that the article could be reworded in a few places to clarify what it is stating.

```` LaurenImmel, thank you for pointing this out. I see now how the wording makes the statement confusing. I will defiantly go back and make the statement clearer. --MadisonLiggio (talk) 01:32, 29 October 2018 (UTC)