User talk:MadsL427/sandbox

Hi Madison, this is a good start and as we have previously discussed, your topic is quite timely and relevant. A few minor points of feedback: the subsection breakdown is good, but I think the section headers could be revised a little bit so they are more focused/compact. Also, in your planned section for future initiatives that companies can take to support mental health of employees, make sure those recommendations are coming directly from sources so that the section projects a fully neutral point of view. DAmyc29 (talk) 17:05, 28 July 2020 (UTC)o you have any ideas for images you might include?

What does the article (or section) do well? I really like how you added hyperlinks to mental health terms in case the reader wants to refer to them. Your sources look like they come from upstanding places (especially the WHO source). Your first header establishes how COVID is expected to affect mental health, and gives a good overview of how, specifically, health will be affected.

What changes would you suggest overall? Maybe add a header of pushback/limitations mental health initiatives right now will face? Like people who are against it (maybe too expensive, not proven to help?)

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? So far, it looks good to me and for creating an article and not adding to one, it seems your article is on a good path. The structure is organized well.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! You used really reputable sources which is making me want to go to department of education publications etc. for my topic.

Miacrutcher (talk) 18:30, 28 July 2020 (UTC)

1. What does the article (or section) do well? I think you have a lot of really great and relevant statistics, which makes the reliability of your article increase.

2. What changes would you suggest overall? I think that you should consider paraphrasing more if possible, as there are lots of quotes. I understand it’s difficult to do, considering Wikipedia’s guidelines though.

3. What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think that it would be really helpful to compare mental health in workplaces in a pre-Covid era to the during/post-covid era.

4. Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? I think you included a lot of great information touching base on a lot of relevant subtopics, like what mental health approaches can be implemented by companies, which is interesting! I want to expand my own topic further.

Tong.l (talk) 20:38, 28 July 2020 (UTC)