User talk:Magmurg/Fast fashion

Your draft has lots of relevant data and statistics that would benefit your chosen article, but it reads a bit like an essay or a journalism piece rather than a Wikipedia article. I would take out phrases such as "in fact" or "as a result" as much as possible to help alleviate this. This feels like you really substantiated the marketing section successfully. You present the facts in a straightforward and nonbiased way. JunoBear (talk) 14:18, 29 March 2022 (UTC)JunoBear