User talk:Mahleawidner/sandbox

Great potential edits! Use this week to draft your contributions and get them transferred to the article page.Professorcravens (talk) 21:38, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

'''Peer Review '''

Hi there,

The sentence you took out, "Their are only two genders everything else is a sexuality" was out of place at the end of that paragraph. It didn't make sense after mentioning the Arkansas Supreme Court case decision. One suggestion I would make is in the sentence before that in the same paragraph says "opposite-sex couples." I would change that to just say "heterosexual couples."

In your sandbox I like your idea of changing the title of the page to "Same-sex" instead of "LGBT".

I think the suggestion for a "Taking the Law into their own hands" section is not needed and an opinionated title that could quickly become unbalanced. If you want to talk about individual state cases, it can go under "Cases" where the page already has numerous states already listed.

The "About the Children" suggestion I think could be its own separate page. I think the purpose of the article you chose is to explain the origin and the problems ad successes in same-sex adoption in the United States. Opening it to opinions of children who were adopted in these two different family settings (heterosexual vs homo sexual) would make this too broad.

Kfill (talk) 02:52, 27 October 2018 (UTC)