User talk:Mailegri/sandbox

Mailegri all great selections, let me look into the translation option and get back to you. For now, think about which article you'd like to improve/create IF translating isn't an option. Gardneca (talk) 07:06, 12 March 2019 (UTC)

Amaterasu Article Peer Review
=== Strong Aspects of the Draft: ===

•I thought you did an excellent job of adding information and solid sources to the specific sections that you worked on.

•Your article was composed in a neutral tone and well-structured.

•The image of the shrine was a nice touch.

•I thought it was great how you referenced historical literature and also hyperlinked those items within your article.

=== Areas of Possible Improvement: ===

•There are a couple instances, specifically in your "Scholarly Debates" section where you use direct quotations from the source. Perhaps, it may make the article flow better to use paraphrasing?

•I think that the section entitled "Relation to Female Positions in Early Japanese Society" could be expanded on. From my knowledge of Japanese culture and society, this is an important topic and likely has extensive literature about it (I found something related to this about Izanami on JSTOR!)

•You could possibly explain some of the Japanese words that you included if you can. This may help with the general clarity of the article.


 * Mailegri I just wanted to make sure you saw that your peer review is here and not in the talk page of your sandbox.
 * Gardneca thanks for letting me know. I see it! Mailegri (talk) 08:02, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Jmkuba thanks for your review, there are some helpful suggestions here. If the source you found on Jstor is helpful to the author, would you post it here for her? Mailegri I really like the sections you added, especially those presenting the various gender roles. Perhaps it might be useful to cross-link to Nu Kwa here, since there is also some confusion as to whether this mythological figure is male or female in the earliest versions of their myths. Keep expanding your sections, and see if you can add some sections about specific regional or lesser-known stories involving Amaterasu. You've done excellent work so far, and I can't wait to see how the final product turns out! Gardneca (talk) 02:42, 20 April 2019 (UTC)