User talk:Maisidro/sandbox

Secondary Edit: Tyler Clayshulte 11/27

INTRODUCTION- The first sentence seems like it can be worded a little better. For example, "especially in its east coast". Perhaps, "especially in the eastern coast". You can remove the "and" between neurotoxins and carcinogens and add a comma instead. You could also remove the "," between "stems" and "removing" and add the word "and" for better flow.

REPRODUCTION- The sentence that starts with "On the other hand,..." you could change the "," between "tall" and "as" and replace with "plant are narrow and tall and contain pollen" to be more concise. -- Did this, thanks! Maisidro (talk) 01:10, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

Multiple cones section- Maybe remove the quote at the end and paraphrase in your own words. -- I liked how it was worded so I asked the professor about keeping it, and he allowed it :) Maisidro (talk) 01:10, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

Pollination section- Is the last sentence referenced by your 7th citation? I think it needs a citation at the end of the paragraph. -- Did this as well! Maisidro (talk) 01:10, 28 November 2017 (UTC) The rest looks brilliant! Good job!

Secondary Edit: Tyler Clayshulte 11/26 In "Development" perhaps edit the "Of the strobilus and the sporophylls" to "Strobilus and Sporophylls" or something along those lines.

As of right now, I think we are on the same page as far as our progress. I am going to work on this all day today (11/26) so I should have some content for you to look over. After, I will see where you are and see if I can add any more references as well as help polish it. We can do this!