User talk:Makaylalooney

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Hello, Makaylalooney, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Notes on VVF
Hi Makayla, Sydney, good job on the article topic - this is an incredibly interesting topic and one that is of obvious lasting historical importance. My main note was that I was a little confused over the part of the healing process - it moves between the past and present, so it feels a little out of place. The second sentence "To have a successful recovery, the first attempt at the surgery had to be spot on." wasn't clear as to whether it was about the past or present. Also be careful of making the writing too casual, as it can sometimes make it harder to show exactly what you mean.

Overall, this looks good and the sourcing is excellent. Good job! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:21, 14 March 2018 (UTC)