User talk:Mallorynermoe/sandbox

Lead section that is easy to understand
The lead section is clear and focuses on the important information of the artist's life. However, a little more specificity could be added, such as the artistic movement his work is association with and the name of the royal court he painted for. History paintings are referenced in the lead section but are not specifically discussed in the article. Regarding the artist's name, is he more commonly known as Justus but Joost is the traditional Flemish spelling? If so, maybe have it read Justus von Egmont (DUT. Joost van Egmont).

Clear structure
The structure of the article makes sense. I think the organization of the Work section is very helpful. I would suggest renaming the Life section to Biography and adding subsections for organization.

Balanced coverage
All of the sections of the article add to the reader's understanding of the subject. I am not familiar with the literature, but adding more citations and mentioning art historians' interpretations and arguments would be very beneficial. I think your planned additions for the tapestry subsection in particular will help balance the content of the article in respects to the artists' prominent works.

Neutral content
The writing style seems to largely meet Wikipedia standards. The language of the Drawings subsection seems a bit out of place and some sentences are opinion-based. There are a few awkward phrases/sentences that could be reworded in the article as a whole.

Reliable sources
More in-line citations need to be added. The References section can be fixed by formatting the sources based on Wikipedia guidelines and alphabetizing by author's last name.

Overall
Your planned additions are solid and add important information and clarification to the article. Your sources look reliable and are in English, which is awesome. My other suggestions are to add an artist infobox and more detailed information to the captions of the images. References to location should reflect the political boundaries of the time, for example Italy should be referenced as the Italian peninsula as it was not a unified country in the artist's lifetime. Overall, I think the article is headed in the right direction and I'm excited to see the changes once they are implemented! Sareidle (talk) 17:01, 28 February 2019 (UTC)