User talk:Malthorp/sandbox


 * Looks great. I learned what an asterism is! I'm not sure if the components are really necessary if you aren't going to say more about them, especially since you quote them already in your introduction. Is there a source for the arabic fact about the sword? The gallery also looks good. I like the images you used, but could you say more about the images? Or maybe the gallery could be formatted nicer so that there is not so much blank space. Basically you covered all my thoughts in your "To do" section, so congratulations on reading my mind. Drenniks (talk) 17:51, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi Mallory, I learned a lot from your page! Very informative, especially the cultural aspects. A couple of things: I don't think you need to talk too much about the components of the sword on this page, as they should all have their own respective pages so a link should suffice, and the references for the cultural meanings would be a priority for page completion. Overall, your article is informative and professionally written. Great job! Klar2d2 (talk) 17:57, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Very strong start. The layout looks great, and I like the cultural references. It would be helpful to have an image of an artist's rendition of the constellation to clarify why it's a his sword. Having a to-do section is a helpful way to keep your thoughts organized, I'll definitely do the same for my own articles in the future. Some info on the nebula component would also be great, but it seems like you're headed in the right direction! Nksaunders (talk) 18:02, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * You might think about putting in a ref to some scientific work that is being done (from a journal article) in the region of the sword. Pzaula (talk) 18:12, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * This is a really nice article. About the length I'd expect from just a small astronomical sign. It was really cool to learn something new about a constellation. Cwlind1997 (talk) 18:14, 12 April 2017 (UTC)
 * I love this. I might work on the overall structure. For instance, including pictures on the left, dispersed throughout the article. The table of contents would probably fit best below the introduction. And the components section could use a couple sentences summarizing each object. Great content! (Lockepatton (talk) 18:19, 12 April 2017 (UTC))
 * found a typo:..suffering from hunger BUT too ashamed.. Pzaula (talk) 18:49, 12 April 2017 (UTC)

Awesome job, you have a lot of really good information! I would suggest moving one of the pictures to the top right at the beginning of when the article starts so people have an image in mind as they continue reading, and maybe dispersing the others throughout the article. Tovarg (talk) 22:17, 16 April 2017 (UTC)