User talk:Mam045/sandbox

K.Lip peer review
You have chosen a very interesting topic and what you have so far is looking really good. There is a lot of good references which makes this article a reliable reference. You have broken the article down into sections which have gives it some structure. This helps make it an easy read; will you be adding any more sections? One recommendation I have would be to hyperlink some words to other wiki articles to allow the readers to search easily the different things you mention. Another recommendation is to try to limit words that are not necessary in sentences. Wikipedia articles are quick to the point. For example the first sentence for feeding, under the carousel feeding subheading " The second stage of carousel is when the orcas actually get to consume their prey". If you remove "actually" you can get your point across without those unnecessary words. Overall, you have a great topic and are doing a really good job at describing what they are doing and the importance of it. K.Lip (talk) 18:45, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback! I will definitely include your ideas as I continue editing the article. Mam045 (talk) 18:27, 23 October 2017 (UTC)