User talk:Mamper/sandbox

Tone
Lovely table for the existing information on the page. Followed the expected tone well. I do wonder if some of the information in your paragraph should be under styles? Look at the existing page for direction for this when migrating the information and ask instructors. Bryantlib (talk) 01:58, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

-Good point, I'll check with the instructors again. - Mary

-All taken care of for now. - 5/11/18

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:53, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Dessert has two “ss”

Many culinary apples are technically “Sharps”. See:

Thompson-Witrick, K.A., K.M. Goodrich, A.P. Neilson, E.K. Hurley, G.M. Peck, and A.S. Stewart*. 2014. Characterization of the polyphenol composition of 20 cultivars of cider, processing, and dessert apples (Malus X domestica Borkh.) grown in Virginia. Journal of Agricultural and Food Chemistry 62:10181-10191. https://doi.org/10.1021/jf503379t

Watch the capitalization of the Classification titles. They aren’t proper nouns, so don’t capitalize in sentences.

Tannin is a measurement of total polyphenols, so I suggest saying “polyphenol composition” in the last sentence.

“YAN (Yeast Assimilable Nitrogen)”: Put the name first and the abbreviation in parenthesis.

ºBrix is the unit of measurement for soluble solid concentration, so it should be written as “soluble solid concentration (ºBrix)”. Ciderprof1 (talk) 16:05, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

-Made edits as per suggestions 5/7/18 - Mary