User talk:Mansourkuleib/sandbox

if possible, adding graphs or charts to make the data easier to read would be helpful.

9 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Crbrenner (talk • contribs) 14:00, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

This sentence is a bit awkward and could use re-wording: "At the same time as this high level of foreign employment exists..."

Organization of the article can be worked on. Good job with grammar and tenses. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jackteitelbaum (talk • contribs) 14:07, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Adding in a visual representation of the statistics you are using could make your information easier to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Crbrenner (talk • contribs) 14:10, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

First Paragraph -Consider adding a heading title to this section if it’s not part of a pre-existing section.

Second Paragraph -Add a comma after “at the same time.” -say “3.15 million to 3.13 million” in the second sentence. -External link “expat” if possible in the third sentence. -Add the word “jobs after “234,191” in the fourth sentence. -After the semicolon in the fifth sentence, where did unemployment from 7.6 percent increase from? -External link “Saudi Press Agency” if possible. -Great job Habibi. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mpr3300 (talk • contribs) 14:16, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

First sentence of second paragraph needs a citation. Make sure that every fact you state has a citation.

‘Decreased marginally’ in second paragraph second sentence may need to be reworded.

‘Expat jobs’ may need explanation as to what it is or an internal link.

‘Saudi Women’s unemployment rare decreased.’ Grammatical error

You have a lot of great information and everything flows really well. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bshoukeir24 (talk • contribs) 14:26, 28 November 2018 (UTC)