User talk:Marb1198/sandbox

Hello there, You have completed an incredibly in-depth evaluation of your article! Great! The details here will help you organize your priorities for the rest of the semester. Which particular articles will you choose for area and sector? Let me know. -Momo Sumomox4nouchi (talk) 02:10, 8 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi

Jackie's Peer Review
GENERAL COMMENTS:

- Overall, good work so far. I find your topic very interesting and think you have identified great articles to contribute to as well as great resources to reference. Your article reviews and summarizing & synthesizing sections show that you’ve really taken the time to develop your thoughts and to be critical of the subject you’re focusing on. For your Area article, I think it is important to provide a historical context of language and education in Guatemala so the reader can understand what forces shaped this system. A few of your sources are about PRONADE and I think it’s useful that your identifying specific aspects to focus on in your drafting. For PRONADE I think your references are scholarly and also great in that they provide both viewpoints of this program. You mention that you might add some stats from the World Bank report which is great because it can add to the depth of the article. But I do recall Clare saying this won’t count as a scholarly source. There was also another source (But That’s Just Good Teaching) which is based on the author’s 3 year study? Although data from this study serves as a primary source rather than a secondary source, I believe you can use the cited materials within the article that the researchers mentions prior to discussing their results.

- Although your sector article is much more developed, you raise good questions about the discourse around CRT. Whether the introduction of new rhetoric is a way of “needs talk,” is it a temporary fix, does it contribute to creating systemic changes? The discussion of culturally responsive or culturally sustaining, makes me think of terms like cultural competent and cultural humility.

POTENTIAL EDITS:

AREA -- Under Historical Context Section:

- "The 10-year period between 1944-1954, also known as the Democratic Spring, became a movement for indigenous and peasant groups." Perhaps you could add a sentence or two to expand on this. Why was this considered a movement for these groups? Was the movement due to their protests or was it led by the federal government. If it was the latter, then this could be a good transition into your next sentence when you begin to talk about the IIN.

- I also think adding a transition sentence before you talk about the Peace Accords could help in providing some order between the IIN and the Peace Accords. Maybe there’s a relation or common theme between the two?

- When talking about PRONADE, it would be relevant to see a statistic about how this program has benefited education of indigenous groups.

SECTOR -- Under "Culturally Relevant Teaching" Introduction

- "Culturally relevant or responsive teaching is a pedagogy[15] grounded in teachers' displaying cultural competence: skill at teaching in a cross-cultural or multicultural setting. Culturally relevant pedagogy encourages collective empowerment requiring students to succeed academically, develop cultural competence, and develop critical consciousness."

I think this part would flow more smoothly and as a leading section it would provide the reader with a bit more context if you initially defined cultural competence (CC). From the first sentence, it sounds as if the definition of CC is a “skill at teaching…” By providing a definition, I think the reader will better understand what it will mean for students to develop or be culturally competent as you go on to talk about this in the second sentence. Perhaps trying: Culturally relevant or responsive teaching is a pedagogy[15] grounded in teachers' display of cultural competence, [insert cited definition]. In this pedagogy, teachers practice the skill of teaching in a cross-cultural or multicultural setting. Cultural relevant pedagogy…

- "It is also effective when teaching indigenous students who have traditional culture, practices, and language that may not be acknowledged in traditional schooling." You could add an example to support this statement just as the previous author gave the example of Canada. I think you could reference your Mccarty source here.

Great work! Nicoleriver (talk) 15:38, 4 April 2019 (UTC)Nicoleriver

Tatum's Peer Review
Hi Marbrisa! I really enjoyed reviewing your wikipedia sandbox and learning more about your practice experience organization. You seem to be off to a good start in regard to your Summarizing and Synthesizing and Drafting sections. As a peer reviewer, it appears that for the article you selected for your area, Education in Guatemala, that you will be focusing on how language serves as a barrier in education for indigenous students. In addition, it appears that you plan to discuss the historical context behind how language became such a prominent barrier to education for this population–referencing the Instituto Indeginista Nacional (IIN), castellinizacion, Peace Accords of 1996, and the National Community-managed Program for Educational Development (PRONADE). Is that what you plan on doing? If so, you are doing wonderfully! If not, I am curious to see what else you plan to do or how I potentially misinterpreted your plan.

I think your addition of: "The official language of instruction in Spanish as mandated by the Education Law in 1965 when Spanish became the official language of Guatemala" is very well done because it enhances the lead section of your article by bringing language into the introduction. One thought I had to potentially enhance this addition to your article in including a link to the Education Law in 1965 wikiepedia article (similar to how previous editors linked the Guatemala wikipedia article. I was able to find a wikipedia article titled Higher Education Act of 1965; however, I was unsure if that was what you were referencing. If not, I am curious to see if a wikipedia article exists on the law you are referencing.

As I moved further along your drafting section I was a little confused why some aspects of your drafting section were bolded, specifically the sub-headings and first paragraph of the indigenous students section because it appears that these are already on your wikipedia article. Are they bolded for organizational purposes for your drafting section, have you already published them to the wikipedia article, or is there something else I am missing?

Delving deeper into your additions to the article I think you did a wonderful job on the Indigenous Education section. I am curious if there is a better way to state the first sentence: "Indigenous students achieve significantly below non-indigenous students in rural Guatemala." I understand what the sentence is trying to get across but I wonder if a sentence similar to this might sound better: "Indigenous students perform significantly lower academically than non-indigenous students ini rural Guatemala." I was also curious if you had a citation for the two sentences that followed the topic sentence about intersectionality and socioeconomic status–I did not see that in the article cited at the end of the paragraph. The last sentence of this paragraph is great and the flow to the history is really awesome–it kind of points out the problem and then tells the story behind it.

Similar to the suggestion I had above, do you think you could internally link the Instituto Indeginista Nacional, castellinizacion, Peace Accords of 1996, and PRONADE wikipedia articles into yours? I was able to find wikipedia for all of those topics some of which were in both Spanish and English. I think you are off to a great start regarding the historical context section and I am excited to see more citations and background information; however, I am confident that is coming soon. I imagine the last two sections of the PRONADE sections (parent participation and challenges/feedbacks) are notes for what you are going to do in the future which looks awesome.

Moving onto your section article, as a peer reviewer it appears that you will be focusing on adding aspects to the existing wikipedia article that will enhance its clarity. I think the additions you have made so far are very beneficial to the flow and clarity of the article. I am excited for you to find more scholarly sources to add more to the aspects you have already added.

Overall, I think the structure of your wikipedia articles is awesome! I really like how you have added to the lead sections to make what is to come in the bulk of the wikipedia articles more clear. For the most part it appears to be all neutral content. My only concern is the sentences in the beginning of the Indigenous Education section of you area article; however, it appears that those sentences were already on the page even though they are bolded in your drafting section. I think the most important thing you can improve upon is referencing more scholarly sources; however you are off to a great start. Feel free to use any of my suggestions or not, and I am happy to answer any other questions you have! Nice job so far! T.sandzimier (talk) 18:48, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Responding to Peer Review
Thank you Jackie and Tatum. You’re comments and suggestions are greatly appreciated.

For my area: Education in Guatemala, I was mostly looking at sources about the current schooling system and what programs have been implemented to address certain inequalities in education, especially when it comes to indigenous students. Inevitably, some of the articles I’ve found have talked about some of the history but there is not much of a focus on it which is why I wasn’t thinking about adding a Historical Context section to my wiki article. However after reading these comments, I think it will be very valuable to add a section on the history of language and education. I mention that Spanish became the language of the schooling system after becoming the official language of the country but I should give more context as to why Spanish became official and what was education before this law? Was education even the same as schooling necessarily? These are things that I have not found in my scholarly sources and will start looking into in further research.

I definitely want to look at the World Bank statistics on the effectiveness of PRONADE in decentralizing schools and creating more accessibility to schooling for rural indigenous students. I have seen some of these stats already and I hesitated to add them because the arguments that some of my sources are making is that while yes, PRONADE has increased accessibility to school, because it’s literally a program where communities start their own schools and self-manage them, there are also many problems with it. For example, the parents feel like forced participants because if they don’t participate then they’re child doesn’t get an education. I have to look into it more, but I think PRONADE schools also follow a curriculum that is still monolingual (will figure out later). But I am hesitant to add this kind of stuff because the WB says one thing and my articles say another so I could write an essay and argue my own side of the story but with Wikipedia, I don’t know how I would oppose these views without being critically analytical in my writing.

I also mention the Democratic Spring being a movement for indigenous folks and thank you for asking me to expand on it. Jacobo Arbenz was the president during this period and it was a movement for indigenous folks because he was calling for land reform and giving back land to the landless, the indigenous people whose land was taken from them as having no land is a reason for poverty for the indigenous community. It was actually the United States who destabilized this government using anti-communist rhetoric because land reforms in guatemala was a threat to U.S. businesses like the United Fruit Company which monopolized land in Guatemala. After overthrowing the government, an authoritarian president came in and since people were upset, a civil war emerged and in those battles, there were several massacres of indigenous people! Some of those survivors are actually part of the community I will be working at and are the ones who founded by org so all of this history is definitely super important to include since it helps us understand the basics for what the current situation for indigenous communities, and thus indigenous education, is.

For culturally relevant teaching, I’m having a really hard time adding to this something other than definitions because there are a variety of different terms to say the same thing but with slight variations and none of the articles I have found take the indigenous student perspectives. Most will talk about African American students in the U.S. and maybe some indigenous students in the United States but not much about indigenous youth in central america which is my focus. I want to give examples of implementations that work but am not sure how to relate it to indigenous students in Guatemala or why org in general.

Thank you both for also reminding me to cite every fact that I include. And also, I didn't realize I could link some of the important terms to their own respective wikipedia page. As I continue to do more research, I will be taking a very important step back and looking at the history of language and education for my area and for my sector, I’m stuck. I’m still not sure what to look for but I will continue to read and education my own self and I will also go back into wikipedia and link other wikipedia articles. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marb1198 (talk • contribs) 03:02, 11 April 2019 (UTC)