User talk:MarcCerr

Lindy Davies
Hello. I appreciate that you are relatively new to the project, so please take these comments as an attempt to offer some guidance. Please take a moment to look over the Manual of Style and especially the Words to Watch article. You have reintroduced peacock terms that the sources don't support (besides being not terribly elegant prose), such as "strongly influenced" for example, which a previous editor has removed in an attempt to restore an appropriately encyclopaedic tone. Section headings shouldn't be capitalised, nor should professions. The claims made in the lede must be supported with reliable, third-party sources as well. I understand that it's tempting to pitch it to sound as interesting and good as it possibly can be, but we endeavour to maintain a tone rather different from that which might appear on a homepage or advert. Happy editing,  • DP •  {huh?} 21:42, 4 September 2016 (UTC)