User talk:MarcellineLaRiccia/sandbox

Hi Marcie: This is a great start. Here are a few others that you might take a look at: the DiFiore scent-marking paper, the Maldonado dispersal paper, the Peres Ebook (see if any of the relevant parts can be viewed), the Stevenson paper on proximal spacing. Njclum (talk) 18:18, 22 July 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Outline
Hi Marcie: Source #1 and #4 don't appear to have anything to do with social behavior. It's good that you have pulled the relevant info from your sources, but it needs to be organized in a coherent manner; this is what makes the outline of the article you will write. Because your section is on social behavior, you might think about organizing information by different types of interactions: e.g., male/female, female/female, male/male, older/younger, etc.Njclum (talk) 17:46, 27 July 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your information was presented without biases, and transitioned well. Some of the wording was a little awkward or redundant, such as: "The female Woolly Monkey are..."("are" should be replaced with "is" or make "Woolly Monkey" plural), "...observed to use..."(I think this would sound less awkward if you replaced "to use" with "using"), "...was the fact that they eat insects."(This redundancy could be taken away by eliminating the words "the fact", resulting in: ... was that they eat insects.). There was also a "they're" that should be "their". You had a good amount of information and cited really well. GBrunelle (talk) 16:10, 14 August 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Rough Draft
Hi Marcie: I think Gina has a valid point about smoothing out the writing, but this is interesting information as the behavior of the females suggests that this is a matriarchal society in which males may be limiting. Of course, that is analysis and has no place in a wikipedia article, but it's interesting none-the-less. My main comment is that although the second section qualifies as behavior, I would not include it under social behavior.Njclum (talk) 15:52, 21 August 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Final Submission
Hi Marcie: You've definitely smooth this out a bit and have provided some interesting information on this species.Njclum (talk) 16:10, 21 August 2017 (UTC)