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Peer Review 1
Hi MarcosXavier78

Hope all is well. The topic of the history of US prisons as a technology of behavior is a good topic. Starting with the 1rst section:

INTELLECTUAL ORIGINS OF THE UNITED STATES PRISONS:

You will see Adam J. Hirsch mentioned in the first sentence and his book "The Rise of the Penitentiary" is at both UO library locations and is a good source covering the early historical period. In historical narratives, the incarceration of American Indians w/the expansion of euro-colonial systems on the western frontier is often amiss, and there are some detailed accounts of these frontier forts incarcerating Tribal people in military forts as a tool of coercion/racial subjugation. A dissertation by Mark Arvid Warburton found in the UO Libraries ProQuest Database entitled: "For the Purposes of Example and Justice: Native American Incarceration in the Upper Mississippi Valley, 1803-1849" highlights this phenomenon - these accounts are often marginalized from social discourse. Other types of prisons/jails have been passed down and it makes fair/balanced representation hard when colonial narratives are so pervasive/minimalize racial disparities/abuses (whose effects are factual). Bentham/Beccarria/John Locke are mentioned, however, no link to the workings of Mettray in France *I believe. Mettray laid out a model of penal reform/subjugation to state power that is articulated by Michel Foucault's writings of Mettray in the chapter "The Carceral" in his book "The Foucault Reader" - this is a succinct chapter that lends credence to a lot of salient & relevant information with regards to the rationale behind prisons and can be found in the UO Library as well.

The middle is fairly hashed out, historically - I did not see a section where the incarceration freed slaves post slavery occurs, which is of historical fact and could add to the body of this article/historical representation. I believe W.E.B. DuBois articulates on many of the struggles post reconstruction/time where many were freed to the bowels of extreme poverty, thus left to be imprisoned for minor crimes, such as vagrancy, and subsequently sent to work on chain gangs. Perhaps the RECONSTRUCTION ERA could be expanded upon to include these factual events. The CONVICT LEASE section speaks to this a little bit - however, there is always the issue of marginalizing Indigenous representation, as this is all occurring on illegitimately occupied Indigenous lands (colonists were not moral beings and conducted a lot of theft/murder/crimes in land grabs)

Also, notice that none of the proposed 'experts' or 'reformers' are people of Color? No W.E.B. DuBois, no mention of Nat Turner (led the slave rebellion), and I am sure there are more that could be tied into history of US prisons, for there was that ideological war between the North/South as to who was better - chattel slave owners/or prison labor in the north. Adam Hirsch's book speaks to this quite a bit. MHG may have some great references to the roles of people of Color in early US history prison building/opposition as well.

Where I see the most opportunity for revision is actually towards the end: No links to the rise of mass incarceration are mentioned. This is an opportunity to shed light on the impacts of US prison systems post-Civil Rights Era and outline the impacts of the US government.

Richard Nixon - Ronald Reagan - Bill Clinton - all the way up to Trump/Barak Obama. A long string of US presidents enacting policies that have exacerbated the US prison system into the monstrosity that it is today. To be honest, I see the most opportunity for development at the end of this article from the 1960s on up to present day. Three strikes, truth in sentencing, mandatory minimums, etc. that disproportionately target communities of Color could be added (it is factual) as well as the redirecting of tax money to prison building/criminal justice, AWAY from public education, etc.

I am excited to read your edits to this article - the way it is right now before your edits feels colonized (as much is)

Looking forward to your edits

Best Regards

(Ewk&#39;sik&#39;nii13 (talk) 16:52, 20 May 2019 (UTC))

Marco's Peer Review
Distracting information: A lot of the information in this article is trying to shy away from the point the American prison system was created as a new form of slavery. To reiterate this point in an a neutral point of view you can use the documentary 13th to reiterate this sentiment. Additionally, since wikipedia is used by everyone for everyone, it is important that it has accessible language and is not hard to digest like it is in its current state. You could break it down to be more easily understood by readers.

Viewpoints: The Eurocentric patriarchal viewpoint is extremely prevalent throughout this article and could benefit from the perspective of a person of color. I think that you could add a lot to this article by simply adding sections created by you and taking out sections that seem heavily weighted with Eurocentric opinion that paints whites as the "good guys".

Off-topic information: There is a lot of reference to other countries and their prison systems, as well as Eurocentric ideologies; however, there is no need to reference this when the American prison system stems from slavery.

Overall, I think you could a lot to this article by taking out information that is unnecessary and redacting the Eurocentric voice. KasiahsMom (talk) 21:37, 21 May 2019 (UTC)