User talk:Margaretconway1702

Welcome!
Hello, Margaretconway1702, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Your draft
Hi Margaret and. I returned your draft to your sandbox because it isn't ready to go live yet.

There are several issues, but one of the major ones is tone. For example, it says

Terms like "dedicated" and "committed" aren't appropriate for an encyclopaedia article. They aren't neutral in tone, they're opinions.

You also need more sources, and you need to change the external links in the body of the article to properly-formatted inline citations. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:24, 29 April 2024 (UTC)