User talk:Maria.Au20

Welcome!
Hello, Maria.Au20, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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COM 482 Introduction
Hi Maria, you introduced yourself on my Wiki page so I wanted to introduce myself as well on your page. I'm a junior majoring in Com, and I'm looking forward to learning more about communicating in online communities. --Kristen RL (talk) 18:18, 6 October 2020 (UTC)Kristen Larrick

COM 482 Introduction
Hello Maria! I finally figured out how to message people on Wikipedia. To introduce myself, my name is Kevin Kim and I am double majoring in Communication and Korean! I really love the article that you chose to improve on about Korean Beauty! I'm so happy that you are working on this and am looking forward to review it soon!Kimkev1 (talk) 21:45, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

COM 482 Introduction
Hi Maria, my name is Iris. I am majoring in communication and psychology. I also choose your article to review because it is interesting. I saw your edits already and it is very well organized. Looking forwards to read more about it! Iriszhou99 (talk) 17:32, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

Welcome!
Greetings and welcome to COM482 and to Wikipedia.

I think that K-Beauty is a good article to try and improve. Unlike many other examples, the article has a ton of text and lots of references and looks like it has been the subject of quite some work in the past. On the other hand, the article seems like it's not is such great shape and there are lots of ways to improve it. I look forwared to seeing you work on it over the next few weeks! — m a k o ๛  14:05, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

Feedback on your draft
Greetings ! I've done a quick pass on User:Maria.Au20/K-Beauty. You seem to have improved the article quite significantly so that's great. I had a few pieces of feedback:


 * There are a bunch of little style things like periods in the wrong places, extra spaces, etc. I've fixed a few of those (you can look at the diff) but more changes like this would be good.
 * The opening paragraph has quite a lot of detail. You might want to look at WP:LEDE for some ideas of how to write a punchy intro lede.
 * There seems to be quite a bit over overlap between the Controversy section and the Beauty Standards and Ideals section. Maybe merge these section and remove redundant text?
 * In general, there seems to be a bit of repetition. Remember that the goal is to improve the article, not to add text to it. If you can improve the article by removing or merging redundant text, that can be an improvement!

Once you've done a final pass to clean up some of this stuff, please go ahead and move your changes over into the live version. I think with another pass, you'll be in really great shape! — m a k o ๛  19:14, 4 November 2020 (UTC)