User talk:Maria Dobbin/sandbox

Peer Review
Great article. I enjoyed reading the content and think the information will be a wonderful addition to the Personality in Animals article. As I’m sure you are aware, when you begin implementing your information into the article, you will have to put the references and in-text citations into the Wikipedia format. I’d like to start off by suggesting that you begin transitioning your references to the Wikipedia format in your sandbox, so when it comes time you will be confident in using this formatting on the actual article. You may also want to play with the formatting of headings to get a feel for it before you start implementing your information, since you’ve added some sections that may require new headings.

I noticed that some of the content in this article did not have accompanying citations, such as in this paragraph: “There has been a surge of research in recent years dedicated to the implications of animal personality in ecosystem function and evolution. Variation among individuals in a population is one of the driving forces behind natural selection. Evolutionary biologists have posited that if there is variation in behavioural traits and if those traits have a genetic basis then they may be subject to selective pressures. For example, differences in behavioural types may result in more rapid evolution because of increase capacity to adapt to rapid changes in an ecosystem. Similarly, ecologists have focused on the effects of animal personality in interactions between conspecifics and other species and on the organization of ecological networks (Wolf and Weissing, 2012).” If the (Wolf and Weissing, 2012) reference applies to the entire paragraph, it may be unclear to the reader since it is such a large paragraph. If this is the case, you could put the citation at the end of a few of the sentences to show this. If not, I would suggest finding more references to support these statements.

For the sentence “Additionally, there is some concern that researchers may be misinterpreting the relationship between personality and behavioural plasticity,” I think a definition of both personality and behavioural plasticity would benefit this section, or even just a wikilink to behavioural plasticity. I am thinking that the sentence after this elaborates on the importance of this misinterpretation, but without an explanation of the two terms and their relationship I was a little confused reading this section. Bf335 (talk) 20:27, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

peer review
You definitely added a lot more to the article and did so in a very well structured way especially to the criticism section. I also think that the other sections that you added were very well done and added more context and substance to the article. For the background section ,it was unclear as to what was your new contribution and what came from the original article, the only way you could tell would be by comparing yours to the original. The section on Human personality vs Animal personality just seemed to highlight how researchers measure animal personality and didn't seem to have any comparison between humans and animals like the title of the section suggested. The additional information that you are going to add to the lead section seems a bit excessive and I think it will make the lead section a bit too long, you could try and take the information you were going to add and make it into a different section or try and add what you have to other existing sections. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Connorfou (talk • contribs) 00:18, 19 March 2018 (UTC)