User talk:MariahRossi/sandbox

Hi Maria, it's Ashley, okay so the biggest thing you need to fix is your layout because right now it is just a full paragraph you're gonna need to break it up. The paragraph itself is very interesting, but you need to create a lead and some sort of different sections like a background or interpretation section like I did for my painting.

Alex Cole Comments
Mariah, I think you did a good job of giving specific information about the Native Americans, like the different tribes involved and the number of Natives that were serving under British command. My only questions after reading your article is who represented the Natives and if that information is available. On the Wikipedia page for the full siege the British leaders are listed but there are no Natives that are discussed in depth. If you could name these leaders and how they interacted with British rule I think that your article would help show that the Natives weren’t simply a bunch of nomads with no government, but were adapting to fit the needs of the time, which meant that they had to fight with the British. In addition, to lend credence to your notes about how the Natives were intimidating, it would be cool to see if there are any letters or articles about how American soldiers felt going up against the Natives of these specific tribes. Again, I am not sure if this information is available, but I think that it would help enhance your article. Alexcole1812 (talk) 03:46, 10 April 2018 (UTC)