User talk:Mariahvasq/new sandbox

Hi Mariah and Laura :)

Your article is off to a really good start! I like the topics you have chosen and the information is really interesting. I think some of the topics might appear a little short though, so they could be expanded upon or maybe combined.

My advice would be to make sure you have everything cited really thoroughly. For example the phrase "This could then lead to damage in co-worker relations and distrust in the workplace" doesn't have a citation after it. Maybe the citation for the sentence before belongs to both sentences?

small grammatical things I noticed:

" Study shows a link " -> "A study shows a link"

" Factors contributing to the impact of job satisfaction: " -> "Factors contributing to the impact on job satisfaction:"

" is known to be one of the unethical " - > " "is known to be an unethical" (although you might need to explain this more to make sure it's still in an unbiased tone)

Overall, great job!!

Amwvtp (talk) 00:08, 24 March 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the advice! I definitely be more aware of where to put citations and with what I am saying in sections. The grammar helps a lot too! Mariahvasq (talk) 22:04, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for your recommendations! I think it is a great idea that you suggested combining short sections together. This is something that we will take a close look at by the end of the semester. I also appreciate you mentioning the citation issue. It is very helpful to see what other people think when reading it. This is something that we will fix right away. Along with this, thank you for talking about the grammatical things and give us some options. That is really helpful! Laurarodguez (talk) 22:26, 10 April 2022 (UTC)Laura Rodriguez

Hi Guys,

Firstly, your comments and additions to the article are very thorough and thoughtful! I especially like the topics you’re going to cover based on your section headers.

I agree with amwvtp’s grammatical suggestions made above. Under the worker well being section I think you meant to write showed instead of “showen”. Also in the leadership section it reads as “in a study done” which isn’t wrong but it might flow better if you say something like “in a study that was done”. You could even include the year of the study to show relevance.

In regards to the commenter above and having short sections, I agree. I think you may want consider combining a few sections. For example, maybe combine “impact on job satisfaction” with the “worker well being” section and call it “impact on employee satisfaction and well being” or something like that. (Also employee seems a little more professional than worker).

Also in the “worker well being” section you state behaviors of machiavellianism, I think an additional citation here could be helpful that way it doesn’t appear to be too opinion-based since there aren’t many citations in this section.

Overall, you guys are on a really great path and I think you’ll be able to greatly improve this article’s quality of content by the end of the semester. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mb4500 (talk • contribs) 19:13, 24 March 2022 (UTC)


 * In regards about the length of the draft, the sections were a bit short since we were unsure of how much the draft should have had. We definitely have plans to add more information to our article and introduce a couple more sources we have found!
 * I think combining the two sections you mentioned would be a good idea! That was something we were discussing while writing was that there was quite a bit of overlap between the two sections. We will look into combining the two!
 * We'll fix the grammar and citations as well. Mariahvasq (talk) 22:11, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! As I said to the other classmate, we will be taking a closer look at the citations so we make sure that everything is well understood. I also appreciate that you mentioned some little grammar errors. This is something that we will change as soon as possible. All of your recommendations will be of help to improve the quality of our article. Laurarodguez (talk) 22:26, 10 April 2022 (UTC)Laura Rodriguez