User talk:Marianelaq17/sandbox

Peer Review
Hey Marianela! Great article and topic! Here are a few things I noticed or questioned. Your first two paragraphs were very informative and helpful for me to get a better understanding of the language and your research, but I don’t think you should include it in your final draft. I would also suggest putting all of the linguistic characteristics under one section. There are traces throughout the article that discuss phonology and linguistic typology, etc. that would probably flow best in one section. Perhaps make the phonology section a linguistics section and incorporate all of this information there. You may want to consider putting the last paragraph of the Barasana-Eduria language” section under the grammar or linguistic/phonology section.

I noticed some smaller details as well. For the titles, “Barasana-Eduria language” and “Geographical distribution” I would capitalize all words. I added a comma in the second paragraph of your language section, and changed “multilinguism” to “multilingualism.”

Overall, I think you have a lot of good information. The map in the geography section was a great addition and I like how you organized the rest of your article’s sections. I think you have a lot of good research to work off of. I look forward to reading your finished product!

Hi Marianela,

Great job so far on your article! I noticed some small revisions you might consider making. In the lead section you switch between past and present tense when referring to your subject. The tense should be uniform throughout. Also, I think that the info in your second paragraph about how different groups are separated by their dialects belongs in a separate section; it has a bit too much detail for the lead. Also, naming the article “Barasana-Eduria” language may be confusing to readers because the text only briefly refers to Eduria, and it may be another dialect.

Thanks! Satomasello (talk) 21:01, 7 April 2017 (UTC)