User talk:MarindaKB/sandbox

Feedback on article
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The additions need to be completely rewritten for these to be encyclopedic in style and structure. I didn't simply delete them, because some of the material may be useful to keep. --JorisvS (talk) 11:57, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

We are working on expanding this article further, also participating in the APS Wikipedia Initiative for Social Psychology class, Pacific Lutheran University, Fall 2013. Intend to raise classs and importance of article further. Some grammatical errors have been fixed, further information added, and links and references incorporated. Encyclopedic style and structure still needs further improvement. Westondg (talk) 12:13, 26 November 2013

Please write to JorisvS and ask him about how much you can delete. Send him the URL for the sandbox so he can look at your rewrite. Also note that another class has worked on this since the spring. You'll want to save their work at least.

That said, here is my feedback: I think this is well-written and organized. I'm not spotting any spelling or grammatical errors. There's just one problem that needs to be fixed. The last section on research cites two studies in detail. This is not "encyclopedic." You also don't mention any research by Savitsky after listing his name. Please summarize the basic findings, and leave out the fine details. Better yet, integrate the findings of both studies, and add in something by Savitsky. If readers want details, they can look up the references. Therefore, rating = 2, not quite ready. However, this is an easy fix. J.R. Council (talk) 19:42, 30 April 2014 (UTC)

Dr. Council, thanks for the feedback! I did write to JorisvS and give him the link to my sandbox. As you recommended, we will be tweaking the research section to make those necessary changes. MarindaKB (talk) 21:13, 30 April 2014 (UTC)

Just about ready to publish
Nice job revising the research section. I made a couple of minor edits myself, which was easier than telling you what to do. Now just delete the 'hard return' back arrows and it's ready to go. I will rate this now as a '1' on the understanding that you'll take this last step before publishing. Way to go! J.R. Council (talk) 03:07, 6 May 2014 (UTC)

Deleted the "hard return" arrows
I went ahead and deleted those hard return "<---" arrows! MarindaKB (talk) 03:28, 6 May 2014 (UTC)