User talk:MarionRobinCute/sandbox

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Nice work on your draft. A few things going forward. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:36, 31 March 2020 (UTC)
 * In terms of the layout of the article, the lead section is very important. The way it's laid out in the existing Gabriela González article is fine, but it should be expanded to reflect the content you're adding to the article. (The lead is supposed to summarize the contents of the article.)
 * I formatted the sections in the standard way for Wikipedia articles. In the "Early life and education" section, her name shouldn't be bolded (it should only be bolded in the opening sentence of the article) and her date of birth shouldn't be restated.
 * - it's better to put her mother's position in a sentence instead of just putting in it parentheses. It's more readable to say "her mother was a professor of mathematics at..."
 * This sort of recollection of someone's childhood is better attributed - "according to..." or something such. It isn't really a verifiable fact, and it's better to tie it to a source directly.
 * References go after punctuation, not before. They should go after periods or commas, not before them.
 * Although it's possible to include external links directly into the body of the text, it's preferable not to. Turning them into inline references is better because it allows a full citation (which makes it easier to track down if the URL gets changed or the page is taken down). It also lets the reader know what the source is before they click through.
 * While the NSF's official channel is relatively good, as YouTube channels go, there are better references out there. If you do use YouTube, make sure you link to a particular point in time in the video, rather than asking someone to watch a whole 71-minute video.
 * It isn't clear to me what role Gonzàlez played in the discovery of gravitational waves.
 * Wikipedia articles don't refer to people by their first name. Just use Gonzàlez or Gabriela Gonzàlez.

Additional feedback
Looks pretty good, but you still have two external links in the article body. I recommend that you use the "manual" tab on the cite tool to generate as good a reference as you can. So while YouTube isn't generally a reliable source, NASA's channel should be. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:43, 29 April 2020 (UTC)