User talk:Markbauhofer24/sandbox

10/16/2018 Evaluation by User:Tholin37/FletcherTholin
Spelling/grammar meets standards but could defiantly be proof read again Language You could replace a few words with ones that bring a bit of life to the article. Organization nearly meets standard Mark You from what I saw need to have three sources linked after each sentence depending one where the information came from? Also maybe a picture linked to Verona would be a nice touch so the reader could see an image and also visit the main wiki page on the subject for even more information. Now if this paragraph was copied from the original Verona page then you need to add your desired information for the assignment and source it. I'm a bit confused with all of this myself however the projects could be very interesting and fun once we figure out the structure. look at the linked article  Coding Does not meet standard you should watch the training videos and double check how to insert the proper format so that the article fits, for example signing it with the proper format. Validity Nearly meets standard some of the information is lacking certain depth and you could maybe explain a bit more about the subjects. Completeness meets standard, however you can always have more information and more dates and facts. Relevance meets standard but once again you have some buffer in the sentences rather than information and could always use more factual content. Sources Does not meet standards you need to cite the sources from where the information came from. And the requirement I believe is three sources and they must be creditable. Citations Does not meet standards you did not cite/have listed sources. References Does not meet standards you need to have references/sources and citations, all information and where it came from need to be listed and accounted for. Tholin37 (talk) 19:53, 16 October 2018 (UTC)Tholin37

Sarah Bethea's Peer Review
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10/17/2018 Evaluation by Sarah Bethea
Spelling/Grammar Does Not Meet Standard

Capitalize first words of each sentence. Avoid giving opinions such as “it is a very beautiful city”. Rather than saying “...holds a lot of history”, consider wording it differently, such as “...has a long history”, simply try to use more formal and concise language. “It is a very visited city” should be worded differently.

Language

Nearly Meets Expectations

Try to keep language formal and concise, while avoiding giving opinions.

Organization Nearly Meets Expectations

Coding Nearly Meets Expectations

Make sure to use WikiCode to cite sources and link to other articles. Validity Nearly Meets Expectations

Be sure to avoid opinions and cite sources for facts. Completion Nearly Meets Expectations

You can talk more about the tourist draws to the city, more about the cultural history of it, or talk about some specific famous buildings. It would be good to expand upon the topics you covered.

Relevance Meets Expectations

While the topics are relevant, there is already an introduction on the Wikipedia page for Verona. It would be good to expand on topics that are not thoroughly covered already, or that are not yet included in the article. Sources There are no sources given.

Citations There are no citations given.

11/13/2018 Evaluation by Fletcher Tholin
Spelling/Grammar Hardly meets standards you could triple check some of the punctuation and use of certain words and phrases it would possibly make the article sounds more inviting.

Language Meets Expectations

Organization Nearly meets standard, you can try to organize the article better and make sure to have a title

Coding Nearly meets standards, you have a few coding errors for example Paris should be bigger text and bold lettering so it stands out.

Validity Meets Expectations

Completion Meets Expectations

Relevance Meets Expectations

Sources Meets Expectations minus the fact that you need more sources unless I was mistaken, however we need ten sources and I only saw 10 that seemed to be a combination of wiki sourced articles and actual sites/book/journal.

Citations Meets Expectations you cited other mentioned wiki articles well but you do need more quality sources from my opinion, I could be mistaken more feedback would be best. References Meets Expectations However I think you should cite more books,web,journals

Florence
Economy

Tourism is the most important for all the industries in the Florentine economy. A lot of the revenue has increased due to the money generated from students studying abroad and international arrivals(3). In recent years, Florence has gained an increase of 5.5% of visitors to the city (2). With international tourism it has brought in over 2.5 Billion Euro to the city. Florence is now one of the most visited cities due to its welcoming of locals and its political campaign managers. Anna Paola Concia, Florence's superintendent of tourism says "Florence is a welcoming city." (4) Florence is a beautiful city with much to offer, with their tourism being one of the most influential increases for money generation it plays a big part to their economy.

Tourism is a big part of Florence's economy, but there are still many other things this city depends on. Florence's key role as a market centre is reinforced by its location and the nexus of transport lines through northern and southern Italy (3). Many of the Florentine's work in the industrial suburbs. They are engaged in making furniture, rubber goods, chemicals, and food (3). Though it is known that Florence relies heavily on tourism and money from international students, they use art reproductions, metals, leather work, glassware and ceramics, along with high fashion clothing and clothes to make a generate a lot of revenue (3). Some stores including Gucci and Ferragamo are produced in the city of Florence (5). Before Milan, Florence was the main dominator is the fashion world for Italy. When they had shows in Florence people would need to stay over in that area so that brought in some revenue. Though recently, there has been an increase in hotel stays. In 2016, There were over 20,500 hotel rooms that was in 570 facilities. The international users occupied 75% of the rooms and 18% were from the United States (9). In 2017, there was 14,968 overnight stays in Florence (10). which is almost 1,000 more than the year before.

Florence is not just a city featured for its art, history, and culture. It is also one of the most important cities for its business centers where they range in any size. (1). Florence shares a lot of daily markets and museums. Due to a lot of by passers, there is a lot of pickpockets in Florence (11). There is a lot of people coming and going due to tourism so there is over crowding at certain popular locations. But there is a problem with that also. People coming and going and not spending the time to actually see these markets and museums to really experience the culture that Florence brings. Dario Nardella, mayor of Florence says “The whole historic centre is a pedestrian centre. It is not for citizens, though, just for big groups of tourists and rich [foreign] students." (12) Florence is becoming more and more like a tourist area that doesn't get the love and experience that the city deserves anymore.

References:

1. http://www.aboutflorence.com/economy-of-Florence.html

2. http://www.theflorentine.net/news/2016/05/florence-economy-double-nations/

3. https://www.britannica.com/place/Florence#

4. http://www.theflorentine.net/art-culture/2017/09/italy-tourists/

5. http://www.firenzemadeintuscany.com/en/fashion/article/in-the-heart-of-gucci/

6. http://www.firenzebusiness.it/

7. Anna Paola Concia

8. https://theculturetrip.com/europe/italy/articles/the-best-markets-in-florence-italy/

9. file:///C:/Users/Mark/Downloads/In-Focus_-Florence,-Italy.pdf

10. https://www.statista.com/statistics/721763/number-of-tourists-overnight-stays-in-florence-municipal-area-italy/

11. http://www.yourcoffeebreak.co.uk/lifestyle/26338763698/where-in-europe-are-you-most-likely-to-be-a-victim-of-pickpocketing/

12. https://www.theguardian.com/world/2015/dec/06/florence-risk-tourists-buildings — Preceding unsigned comment added by Markbauhofer24 (talk • contribs) 01:45, 7 December 2018 (UTC)