User talk:Markwhite01/Cleveland Apollo/Jdementor Peer Review

First paragraph: I think you should omit the catalogue number. Try adding that in another area. It makes it distracts from the other information. Also, for the dating “(Greek, about 400 BCE to about 330 BCE)” maybe you should shorten this by just saying circa 400 BE-330 BCE.

I think “Apollo the Python-Slayer also known as Apollo Sauroktonos (Lizard-Slayer)” should be moved to the first opening paragraph.

“The statue is right arm above the elbow, a large portion of the left arm and shoulder, and the tree” This sentence is a bit confusing. “ the left hand survive along with the small reptilian creature.” What reptilian creature? If it is not shown in the pictures, I think its best if you make it clear that it is not visible.

I like the first sentence in Scientific Investigation

First sentence in scholarly investigation is confusing, try rewording it. Second sentence “is an interesting story” strays from being neutral.

You have very good research information. As a reader, I would like to know more about the details, context, and art history side to this piece. Maybe try talking about the art side of it, its style etc. Also, try adding more commas within your sentences or breaking some of them down.