User talk:Marleej47/sandbox

heath Luallen ; peer review
The edits give description go predestination, final judgement, and resurrection. The description of predestination appears to be an added subject.

The edits give a brief description with no sources listed. It is difficult to tell how much was added to the original page.

The edits are vague in description and cites no one, not sure how to review your edits. Grade : b

JM's Peer Review
One comment on what your individual changes do well: Predestination is a subtheme in eschatology that is helpful as a new section in the revised entry.

(There is not enough here for me to evaluate in order to give more feedback)

Two comments on what needs improvement:

I can't tell what tasks you were given as part of the overall group contributions. For the sake of this feedback, I'll assume you were tasked with predestination (in the Qur'an, right?).

The section "Predestination" needs to be revised for clarity: how is this theme related to eschatology in the Qur'an? Make sure your edits are clearly filling the assignment guidelines related to the Qur'an and eschatology. For example, in the "Predestination" section you write: "Death is also seen as a homecoming. When people visit tombs, they are having a specific spiritual routine. The correct way to visit someones tomb is to recite parts of the Qur'an and pray for the deceased." Besides spelling and grammar errors, what do these points have to do with the Qur'an? Revise for clarity and adequately covering the topic (first rubric).

Your revisions do not meet the requirement for expected contributions to the overall page edits. Expand upon the sections you have been working on if you would like an improved grade. You need to have at least three citations, and a substantial discussion of each as part of your contribution to the overall edits.

Preliminary grade: C/D Jaclyn-Michael (talk) 19:37, 8 April 2019 (UTC)