User talk:Martin Lawson/sandbox

Madigan's peer review
Hi Martin!

I think it is great that you are representing more countries on this page. Here is my advice.

Canada: You have a balanced explantation of prevalence rates, specific populations, and the efficacy of asthma treatment. My two suggestions here are: 1. Consider switching the first and second sentence order so it covers ages 4-11 before 12+ since that is chronological in a lifetime. 2. Can you give an example of what kind of treatment you are referring to?

Latin America: Here you do a nice job listing the prevalence rates and consider the geographic and economic factors of the disease as well. My two suggestions here are: 1. Consider naming the section "Latin and Central America" because you discuss Cuba. 2. Consider adding more information to the sentence about prevalence in urban areas, as I read in the article that it is due to air pollution.

Finally, if you could find data from Asia, Australia, or Africa too, that would be a great way to round out your findings and make it a globally inclusive analysis.

Overall great job!

Colettedepardieu (talk) 23:03, 24 November 2018 (UTC)Colettedepardieu