User talk:Marvins-island/sandbox

I think that you have done a god job editing the sections you have to make them more clear. I also think that you have added information to the existing text well, especially in your lead. I do think that for the paragraph about the battle, it might be more effective to flip your paragraph, start with the sentences about what battle is possibly depicted and then go into why that battle is significant, and then the important details that you have picked talked about to visually show that this battle was important and shows Alexander the Great's power. I also hope that you will add something that explains what you mean in the lead that this is a combination of Italic, Hellenistic, and Roman styles later on in the article. I think it's an important point that needs to be explained further, but I know that would be probably too much in the lead, so maybe somewhere else? I think you're off to a good start. --Belainegreen (talk) 13:48, 31 October 2019 (UTC)