User talk:Mary.kittridge/sandbox

Hello! I was reading over your epidemiology page and I wrote this information on your peer edit review, but I wrote it here just to make it clearer. Overall, I think its a good base, and a good start. It has good information on the early-onset neonatal sepsis which reinforces the larger page which encompasses everything about neonatal sepsis. For my suggestions, there are difficult and large words which someone who doesn't have a strong background in medical terminology may struggle to understand. Having a link for words would be helpful, as they would then be able to find out what that word is or what the procedure happening is. The epidemiology seems to be directed specifically to early-onset neonatal sepsis. Should that be included in the title as it really on contributes to that part of neonatal sepsis? Some sentences in the end are a little long and also seem quoted, however, it they aren't quoted than it is fine. Again, I think its a good start!

Vuej2093 (talk) 00:23, 25 November 2019 (UTC)