User talk:MaryKPoe

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Instructor Feedback for Draft
Good start overall. I think you are bringing in some good sources to support your contributions. My suggestion is to move your additions about emotional and informational support to a new section about "findings" or "practical applications." Then add a few more examples to bolster that section. Good addition to the supportive communication in business section. I'm not sure I see the fit for the need to belong and relational maintenance sub-sections under the social media section because these processes can occur outside of social media as well. I like how you started to add to these sections but there will need to be more development and possibly a re-organization to move these sections out from the social media section. There could be some sources for the need to belong section. Try to avoid using the phrase "has been proven" because social science research rarely proves something, but instead provides evidence for something. Give some more information about the study showing that supportive communication through social media can improve psychological well-being. I like the disadvantages to support section. I think you just have to be clear what content is coming from what source and cite appropriately. There is only one source cited at the end of that section so it's difficult to know if the other information is just from you or from other sources as well. I like the visible and invisible support section. This is a great addition to the article. Be careful not to be too contradictory in the first paragraph though because it seems like you are saying visible support has all these problems and visible support is great at the same time. Need to clarify and revise accordingly. Do relationships tend to improve with invisible support OR does well-being or is it both? Jrpederson (talk) 03:18, 13 October 2020 (UTC)