User talk:Maryamattar/sandbox

Hi Maryam, I thought that the section about consequences of a breakup was a strong idea. The original article was lacking this section and I think you wrote it well. I think that the draft could be better by fixing the citations, so that they link to the reference. I also am confused with the "Mitigating Factors" section, as there is nothing there. I think that you have a strong addition to the existing article and are only missing the references and additional information for the last section of it. Otherwise, very well done :) Patel.nikita17 (talk) 20:36, 16 June 2018 (UTC)

Hi Maryam, You're absolutely right about the original article only covering the events leading up to a breakup and not the aftermath. You evidently have a lot of scientifically-backed information to add regarding the consequences of a breakup, so this was a great choice to work on! I agree with Nikita that it is important to make sure your citations are linked to the references, but this should be a fairly quick fix. I would just read through your sections to make sure to catch any wordiness/minor grammatical errors as you are finalizing your work, but apart from a few small things (such as changing "who had just recently underwent" to "who had just recently undergone") your article is knowledgeable and well written! Great work :) Juliedobkin (talk) 15:37, 19 June 2018 (UTC)