User talk:Marybarbour

Warren Lehrer
It's probably simpler if you compare your text to that of the sources you have provided url links for. Remember that a close paraphrase is still a copyright violation. I've seen worse, which is why it's not deleted yet, but it's clear that some sections follow too closely the wording of the source.

If you work on this, note that the article is badly underlinked (which also makes it look as if it was copied). For example, Queens and Yale University have their own articles. Also watch the tone; "many awards" is weasel wording. Give a number, or leave out many. There are similar examples.

Use normal capitalisation for headings, don't repeat refs in External links, give ISBNs for books. The further reading section is irrelevant.

Jimfbleak - talk to me?  07:35, 3 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi Jim! Thanks for getting back to me. I made the revisions you suggested and tried to ensure that the copy does not adhere too closely to any other source - it is all original content. I added in ISBN numbers, wiki links and removed the further reading section and extraneous links as well. Please let me know if there are any further changes I need to make in order to get this approved and I will be happy to do so. Thanks again, Mary. Marybarbour (talk) 18:49, 3 October 2014 (UTC)

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I made some changes Jimfbleak - talk to me?  06:08, 4 October 2014 (UTC)
 * References look much better if you format them as I've done the first two for you so you can see
 * Book and journal refs should have the relevant page numbers if possible.
 * The language is still a bit hagiographic, with opinions presented as fact
 * Book journal and play titles should be italicised, and you don't need book dimensions or total pages

Thanks for all the help on this. I made the suggested changes and altered the language to include fewer opinions. I hope this helps. Thank you!

Mary Marybarbour (talk) 18:40, 7 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Ok, looks better, you just need to wait to see what a reviewer says now Jimfbleak - talk to me?  05:52, 15 October 2014 (UTC)


 * I still think that your references will look better if formatted as I suggested above,, otherwise just wait for a reviewer to comment Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  06:23, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

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