User talk:Maryhillard/Undocumented People subsection of Social Impacts Article

PROF FEEDBACK
--Liliput000 (talk) 20:04, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
 * NOTE that you have feedback from Meghan and Bella in your collaborations doc! I didn't transfer that over but did you a favor by transferring your content!
 * first subsection seems quite important so just turn that into sentences and include your sources!
 * second subsection, change "illegal" to "undocumented"
 * I carried over the first source from the link but you'll want to manually generate a citation for that one. This may involve working backwards as to where you arrived at this PDF from
 * the "Hospitals are..." sentence is a bit incomplete --- I want to know what the implications of this
 * from "Although" to "In general" -- could use revision and/or moving around --- getting to the "In general" sentence and the one after it are good, but I again want something more after this --- what is the "and yet..." and do you have a source for it?
 * I see you want to add a few more subsections but what you can do is include that on the article's talk page as something that could be added to your sub-section