User talk:Masonzhang98/sandbox

Good background information on the development of the game! You've got clear facts presented w/out bias or vagueness. The "release" section is especially thorough and clear. There are some minor grammatical errors. The former portion of the first paragraph is really well-cited, but the latter portion could use more sources. The first paragraph might also be split up into a few smaller paragraphs just for ease of reading. The rest of the article after that has plenty of sources. I think MORB can probably just be an in-text link since it's another wiki page? The information about the champions seems like it might be expanded and clarified more. Rmhargrove (talk) 19:14, 31 January 2017 (UTC)

Feedback on League of Legends draft
I looked over the text that you included in your sandbox, but it looks like this is primarily existing text from the article. I'll wait to see your new updates/contributions. Please let me know if you have any questions or if I can help further. Thanks Tburress (talk) 00:09, 2 February 2017 (UTC)