User talk:MasterValdi/Le Hoang Hung

"e Nguoi Lao Dong in Tan An, Vietnam ... " what does that mean and add he after that sentence When they say douse with some sort of chemicals what kind of chemicals are they and if that is unknown try rewording to sound more proffesional and uncapitalize the H in he in the sentence after turn January 30 in to January 30th or put the date and when you say police thought someone was seeking revenge restate it and say police seem to believe that they think his killing is related to something that he reported make Febuary 20 Febuary 20th or put the date change "vietnasmese goverment were doing" to was going you dont need to repeat hung twice in back to back sentences in the first two sentences of the career section also the last two sentences in that section can be re wordered or explained more and clarify the last sentence of the article explain what you are talking about and check the duplication of sources if its the same source use twice try and mark it once but link it twice in the article Acmaxey (talk) 22:58, 15 October 2011 (UTC)