User talk:Masterstuffing/sandbox

Comments on Bibliography
Addison: You've put a lot of effort into finding resources for your topic, which is admirable, but you haven't accessed all of the primary resources that are listed in the shared bibliography: e.g., Baber and Babbit, McCollum, Schulse. Note that you can erase things from your sandbox; a little more organization would make it easier to find and evaluate your bibliography.14:57, 11 December 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Outline
Addison: You have an outline of topics, which is good, but the point of the outline is to include the information you plan to include under these subject headings, as well as indicate the source of each piece of information. Reading further, your draft is really what you should have for your outline; good job on that. Njclum (talk) 15:02, 11 December 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Rough Draft
Addison: Good organization, but here are some comments. First, your material will be contained under a single heading in the article. Make each sentence a complete sentence. You do not need to put the author's name in parentheses; the numbered citation is fine.Njclum (talk) 15:26, 11 December 2017 (UTC)