User talk:MattMan1995/sandbox

Article Needing Additional Sources
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/L%27amour_parfait MattMan1995 (talk) 01:00, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * That's a very short article. Remember, you need to add four sources, which means you'd have to expand the article a good bit. If you want to do that, go ahead. If you choose another article, let me know. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:52, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

New Article for Additional Sources
I thought about it and you're right. I would prefer to edit this article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vietnam_Border_Defense_Force — Preceding unsigned comment added by MattMan1995 (talk • contribs) 22:04, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry to say that I have reservations about this one as well. First of all, it needs a lot of copyediting - the prior contributors were not entirely proficient in English. At the very least, the lead section should be polished, and a template should be added at the top marking it as an article in need of copyediting. But more importantly, you should make sure that you can find enough secondary sources about the subject. Do some research. If you find that we don't really have enough good sources about this subject in English, then you might want to find yet another article. Josef Horáček (talk) 13:49, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

This is my Articel for Editing
I think this one will better fit and be easier to work on and find sources for. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Atomic_battery comment added by MattMan1995 (talk • contribs) 20:45, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

===Additional Sources=== http://www.osti.gov/scitech/biblio/6377296

http://www.osti.gov/scitech/biblio/168371

http://electronicsbus.com/atomic-batteries-nuclear-batteries/


 * I like the article you chose, but your sources should be better. You are required to use the library resources. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:00, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
 * You didn't add the sources to the article the right way. You will notice that another user has fixed the problem by adding the tag around your citations. Did you use the "Cite" function? Josef Horáček (talk) 16:19, 26 February 2015 (UTC)

Article that Needs a Lead
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Graffiti_in_Hong_Kong http://www.osti.gov/scitech/biblio/168371

I believe that the content of this article is sufficient. However the one difference I would make would be to change the header "Government Response" to the very end of the article. Other than that all it needs is a lead.
 * It's not a well-written article, but a good lead should improve it. There is no need for a section that defines graffiti. Likewise, you don't need to define graffiti in your lead. All that is needed is an internal link to the "Graffiti" article the first time you mention the word. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:24, 26 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your draft lead is not quite right. Don't worry about defining or describing graffiti in general terms. The focus of the article is graffiti specifically in Hong Kong. You should safely assume readers will be familiar with urban graffiti, and if they aren't, they will click on the internal link to the "Graffiti" article (you will provide the link - see my comment above). Also, Ai Wei Wei is not a caricature. He is a Chinese artist. Josef Horáček (talk) 16:28, 26 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your changes were very minimal and not enough to really improve the lead. Josef Horáček (talk) 12:21, 10 March 2015 (UTC)