User talk:MaximillianSearles/sandbox

Maximillian Searles's peer review
1. The article did a great job in expanding the Career section of the page. Additional subsections were added and include: Educational Career and Political career. A Personal Life section as well as a Publications, Works Contributed, and Awards section was added to the article. The addition of the subsections/sections helped to create a clear structure for the article. The Publications, Works Contributed, and Awards section was expanded and appropriate/reliable sources were added. I was impressed by how much the article was expanded from the original article. There wasn't any turn of phrase the describe the subject in a more clear way since the article had new sections and no rephrasing occurred; however, the way in which the new sections of the article was written described the subject in a clear and understandable way. The content that was added to the article seemed to be neutral, which is key in a Wikipedia article.

2. I suggest that the author continue to expand the article. I think it would be an improvement if the lead section, education section, Political Career and Person Life sections were all expanded. These changes would be important because they are think are key sections in gaining a full understanding of the topic. The original article is relatively vague and does not contain much information that contributes to the understanding of the subject.

3. The most important thing the author could do to improve the article would be to expand each section so that the article becomes one that presents detailed and relevant information about the subject yet remains clear and easy to understand.

4. I think I could apply adding subsections to the article I am working on. I hadn't thought of this idea and it is a good way to organize a section and create a clear structure for the article.

Kaosuna (talk) 22:56, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Maximillian Searles's peer review
1. The article did a great job in expanding the Career section of the page. Additional subsections were added and include: Educational Career and Political career. A Personal Life section as well as a Publications, Works Contributed, and Awards section was added to the article. The addition of the subsections/sections helped to create a clear structure for the article. The Publications, Works Contributed, and Awards section was expanded and appropriate/reliable sources were added. I was impressed by how much the article was expanded from the original article. There wasn't any turn of phrase the describe the subject in a more clear way since the article had new sections and no rephrasing occurred; however, the way in which the new sections of the article was written described the subject in a clear and understandable way. The content that was added to the article seemed to be neutral, which is key in a Wikipedia article.

2. I suggest that the author continue to expand the article. I think it would be an improvement if the lead section, education section, Political Career and Person Life sections were all expanded. These changes would be important because they are think are key sections in gaining a full understanding of the topic. The original article is relatively vague and does not contain much information that contributes to the understanding of the subject.

3. The most important thing the author could do to improve the article would be to expand each section so that the article becomes one that presents detailed and relevant information about the subject yet remains clear and easy to understand.

4. I think I could apply adding subsections to the article I am working on. I hadn't thought of this idea and it is a good way to organize a section and create a clear structure for the article.

Kaosuna (talk) 01:40, 9 November 2018 (UTC)