User talk:Maxmcq11/Shamanism: Archaic Techniques of Ecstasy

Right off the bat, I could get to both of your sources and did not seem to have to pay for anything or be logged into an institution for access. Next, I had a hard time figuring out what your contribution was, but when I compared your sandbox to the actual published article, I figured it was the part in bold. I definitely think you need to add some more content to your contribution to the article. However, from what you did include, it seemed pretty solid. I liked the links out to other articles on Wikipedia, I feel like it helps the reader gain a better understanding of the topic. There is not really much else I can say besides add more than just three sentences! Best of luck! --Ewizard123 (talk) 21:22, 2 December 2020 (UTC)

I think you chose a good section to edit, as, as it stands in the current article, it is extremely barren. However, I think you could definitely stand to add a little more information regarding the subject, as it still seems to be a little short. Both of the links you've cited work well, and I did not hit a paywall trying to access either one. Since your text is on the shorter side, I would recommend adding a third source to pull more information from. There were no grammar or spelling errors, and your writing was nice and precise! Also, you presented just the facts and in no way tried to push the reader into having a certain opinion. Tingserg (talk) 00:17, 3 December 2020 (UTC)