User talk:Maxpierro99/sandbox

I like how your article is pretty much almost completely formualated with your citations imbedded. Your piece seems to be quite objective without any personal bias. I enjoy how it is written immensely; grammar, punctuality, spelling, etc. It is quite well done. There is the possibility for more to be added on how women are subjected to Compulsory Heterosexuality so as to reinforce your point. The 3rd sentence, beginning with "Common examples" has a list with commas used for the splicing of the different points on the list, as well as splicing the list within the 2nd point. To avoid any error or confusion, you could instead of using commas to splice the larger list; use semicolons. Vanderson2415 (talk) 06:38, 15 October 2016 (UTC)

I do like how it likes and sounds, it looks pretty good so far. With that being said a few pieces look like they were copy and pasted from the live article but that's fine, I would just like to see more of your own research thrown in there! Maybe one or two new sources and information from there! Besides that it looks really good!TRacer202 (talk) 01:57, 17 October 2016 (UTC)