User talk:Mayson Crowe/sandbox

Feedback on potential topics
Your potential topics look like great candidates for editing. I especially like the idea of creating an article for Hiroshi Nagai. If you go this route, you can also edit the Eiichi Ohtaki page to include a link to Hiroshi Nagai. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 03:51, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on Project Proposal
This looks fine, though you'll want to continue looking for quality sources you can use. One thing you might try is reading the Japanese-language wikipedia articles for these topics and checking out the sources they cite. You don't have to read everything, but some of the Japanese-language sources may be easy to manage (especially if they take the form of lists of exhibitions, albums, etc).

You may also want to focus on creating an article for Hiroshi Nagai, even if the sources are scarce. I recognize that the work that goes into creating a new article, formatting it correctly, and making the case for notability is equivalent to gathering and reading a few extra sources. So I would encourage you to think about how you know this artist is important and retrace your steps a bit. If you learned about him in forums or some other source that isn't exactly citable, then maybe those not-so-citable sources reference press coverage or information from venues or something you can use to establish on Wikipedia that this is an important figure in contemporary Japanese art. If you do that, even if you don't quite hit five good sources, that's plenty for this project (and you wouldn't need to worry about additionally editing the City Pop and Eguchi pages, though of course you would be more than welcome to do so). Ctextor at uofu (talk) 19:06, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

CT Feedback
We'll see what Wikipedia says about the article this time, but in any case do your best to establish notability. Here are some possible avenues you might take:

This gallery's page has some information on Nagai, which the original author of this page(?) seems to have used but not cited: https://dmoarts.com/en_exhibition/2013/

"HIROSHI NAGAI : Born in Tokushima 1947 year of graphic designer On a freelance illustrator from 1978 through. Illustrations and clear tropicalRation, used a number of ads, posters, the CD jacket or recordEvaluation is very high. Album jacket A LONG VACATION of Eiichi Otaki,NIAGARA SONG BOOK, AOR compilation CD breeze seriesIncluding the jacket illustration of such, design, music critic, in FMI develop personality, such as a DJ, a wide range of activities. As publications,Picture book A LONG VACATION, HALATION (CBS Sony publication), NIAGARASome SONG BOOK (Shogakukan), art book Time goesby ... (the BUNKASHA)."

You might try tracking down some of the publications the site lists. You could add a list of his publications to the draft, with links to amazon, google books, etc, that serve as citations that get you closer to notability. You could also try to find other galleries that have a record of exhibiting his work--those records (websites, or whatever else you find) also go toward establishing notability. If there are album cover designs he has done for artists that already have Wikipedia articles, mention that and link to the existing article. All these kinds of things help prove that Nagai is important.

Finally, I found an article in Japanese that you may be able to borrow through ILL in the next couple of days: https://ci.nii.ac.jp/naid/40016933175 Ctextor at uofu (talk) 16:59, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
As far as I'm concerned, the draft on Hiroshi Nagai contains a good base for a page to start off on.

I'm not aware of how many sources there are which contain information on this individual, however I'm certain there's more to be said about him and his art. The sources also seem to have credibility and I don't see much of a problem with them.

Regarding grammar and vocabulary, I do feel there's some improvement to be made on what's already there. For example, "Despite being inspired to paint through soul music, the genre that Nagai loves, he has developed album cover illustrations for Japanese pop music." sounds a weird and should be worded in a slightly different manner.

In addition, I'm not quite sure having a subtitle as 'His Japanese counterpart page got pushed through with no decent sources, why can't this one get pushed through with 4?' is all that helpful. Adding in other subcategories such as 'Personal Life' or 'Themes' would further enrich the page.

Like Krystyn had mentioned in her peer review, I unfortunately couldn't see any picture on the page either but I'm hopeful that you'll be able to add one and possibly some more information.

DarianRes (talk) 20:06, 10 April 2018 (UTC)