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Treaty 7 Article Review

 * The text fails to elaborate on the "southern part of Alberta"
 * The text should expand on why they want the agreement and how they intended on bringing their ideas forward
 * what is the context of signing the treaty
 * explain the number treaties
 * text should explain why they signed a second time
 * why did Prince Charles come
 * text should elaborate on the crown's obligation to first nations

Pemmican
When reading through the wikipedia article on pemmican, it was clear that the subject matter was very well researched. The sources were relevant to the topic as well as the use of images was extremely well done as they each depicted a specific scene form the process of making pemmican. Although for the most part the article was written using neutral language, there were some choices in wording specifically in the "History" section that made it sound as though pemmican was the only food source utilized on some expeditions. This was not the case and that type of biased language may suggest something that's not true. Although there is mention of the Métis group and their use of pemmican, it is not as heavily researched as the usage of pemmican to the European settlers. The links of the citations do work and they seem to be quite relevant and up to date on the topic. There were some conversations happening on the talk pages and people were wondering about certain ingredients and if they were used int he making of pemmican, such as blood. People were also discussing the reason behind why it keeps so well and there was no conclusive answer. This article touches on the use of pemmican in a lot more detail than we discussed in class. What we discussed in class was relevant to the subject and gave the detail that was needed, however, in this article, the detail about the processes of it and serving sizes are relevant to the the topic, however were not relevant to us in our class. Overall the article was well written and had a lot of detail that gave the readers a solid foundation of understanding when looking at pemmican.