User talk:Mbmcginn/sandbox

There seems to be a good start here. The sandbox appears to be a rewording of the current article. The rewording seems to be a better flow than the original article. The citation added is a good example of editing the article. What needs to be added is a lot more research to be done. This first draft is very short and lacks a lot of substance for future drafts. Cbkerr (talk) 17:15, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

On the page itself going forward in terms of edits, look to add much more of his accomplishments and impacts he has made. There is only real information in the biography section as Fictional Depictions is literally one sentence.Also children section can probably just be apart of biography or make a better personal life section in future edits. Keep looking at grammar but there is not a lot of information on the page and you can look to add much more when you do research. Add more subsections to the article that you feel are necessary to make the page appear more whole. Cbkerr (talk) 17:20, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review, Emily Miner, 3/11/2019
Your article seems to have a lot of information on the background of Medici but lacks some context on his own accomplishments. I would recommend adding more sections and breaking up the information a little more to make it easier to read. As well, researching some more information to include in the article and adding sources to verify would be good! I like the sentences that you have added in your sandbox. They are informational and easy to read. Some additional research and sentences would be great for the final article. Good luck with your research! Emmyminer (talk) 02:01, 12 March 2019 (UTC)