User talk:Mbraha12/Hemoglobin H disease

Peer Review
The rest of the article is good. You may consider adding some links to malaria and thalassemia in the epidemiology section.

References need to be fixed.

Peer review guidelines:


 * Check for readability - Overall very good, even for a high school level. I think there could be some grammar and clarity edits in the pathophys section.
 * --- This first paragraph of pathophysiology can be improved for grammar and clarity. You also use both the numerical and written our forms of numbers (3 and three). So making that conisistent throughout would be good. Suggestion: The genotype of healthy individuals with four normal copies of HBA1 and HBA2 is annotated as aa/aa. In individuals with deletional Hb H disease, there is deletion of three of the four α-globin alleles, which is annotated as --/-a, representing a loss of three copies of the gene.
 * Adherence to topic / Not getting off track - No tangents
 * Organization & Flow - Excellent organization and flow. Includes everything I think is important.
 * Use of images and figures - N/A
 * Proper use of citations - Citations look correct.
 * Quality Sources, i.e. resources open to the public - good and up to date references.  References have some red text (errors) that needs to be fixed. 
 * Check for bias and equal-sided arguments - Very neutral, no obvious biases.
 * Provide productive and professional critique - Overall, I think this is a great article! You made it very approachable at a high school level while having plenty of information even at a clinical level. There is plenty of information in the diagnosis section and treatment section. You could consider making some edits to discuss prognosis as it's something that a newcomer to the topic may find important. Overall great job!

Jamesle1995 (talk) 23:10, 8 January 2023 (UTC)