User talk:McLaren481/Suso Cecchi d'Amico/Peanutdoll Peer Review

Peer Review
Peer Review on McLaren481 on Suso Cecchi d’Amico

Lead: In the lead the user appears to have made the original article more specific. They also create fuller sentences so that there is a clearer flow to the content they are displaying

Content: in the body paragraphs of the articles, the user ties up the loose ends that were originally not a part of the article. They make note of how originally d’Amico was a translator who became a screenwriter. The user found the names that were not included in the original article that I would say are detrimental to understanding d’Amico’s rise to stardom.

Tone and Balance: I would say that the tone is not exactly neutral. While it makes sense to favor the director that one is writing about, the writing uses particular phrases that encourages a sense of favoritism of the director. The article, though well written and informative, feels more like a review on the director's life, rather than a site stating factual information.

Sources and References: The references included on this article has a lot of interviews. While interviews are good, I can see how the writing comes across as less neutral because of the type of information gathered.

Organization: The article is well organized and clear. There is not too much going on, and I found it very easy to find information

Overall: I enjoyed reading this article. The writing was excellent and I never felt bored while reading it. My only critique would be the article’s lack of neutrality but other than that I was happy to read this page on d’Amico. GreenBruchert8 (talk) 05:11, 15 December 2023 (UTC)