User talk:Mcg161/sandbox

After reading your article on the Tagish language, I want to say that I believe your lead summarizes the overall article fairly well and addresses certain sections that I can tell will be present in your final draft. However, the paragraphs you've developed seem a little spaced out and you could group a couple such as the middle two together, though obviously not necessarily. Although most of the wording has a scholarly and encyclopedic tone, the last part "included later on" seems to be an outlier of that tone and not necessary, especially since the reader would easily be able to find it if looking for it. You also seem to have an extensive list of sources, and upon looking at a few, they all seem to contribute a fair amount of relevant information to your article. I look forward to seeing the finished product. Obroydo (talk) 17:15, 21 March 2017 (UTC)